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Post by elliotdude on Mar 15, 2007 19:18:53 GMT -5
Here's Scene 7 of Elliot's Academy:
(Nighttime. Giselle is sleeping in a quiet meadow hill. Elliot (offscreen) throws a rock (dosen't hit Giselle) but there's no response. Elliot throws another rock, and still response. Elliot throws a small rock and it hits Giselle by accident. Giselle then awakes)
Giselle (after being hit by small rock): Ow! What the-
Elliot (at the bottom of the hill):Psst! Psst! Giselle. It's me, Elliot.
Giselle: Elliot? How did you know I was here?
Elliot: Your brother, Floyd told me.
Giselle: Really? I guess blood is thicker than water.
Elliot: I know. I heard.
Giselle: What are doing here? Aren't you suppose to be with your assigned team?
Elliot: Don't worry. Floyd has got that all sorted out.
(Meanwhile back at the Alpha 5 Squadron camp. A badly made life size wooden dummy of Elliot and everyone falls for it.)
Monroe: Why isn't Elliot talking?
Floyd: Oh, uh... because, uhh, he has um......laryngitis. Yeah, that's it. He has laryngitis.
Lazlo: Laryngitis?!? Oh no! (holds down the dummy) He needs CPR! (Gives the dummy CPR) He's not breathing. He's not breathing! NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Floyd: Look, it's a dummy all right!?!?
Lazlo: Oh. A dummy! He's been turn to a dummy! NNNNOOOOOOOOOOO!
(Back with Elliot and Giselle)
Elliot: I just couldn't stop thinking about you. You were in my mind every second of every minute of every hour of every day of- well you get the idea. The point is, I love you, Giselle!
Giselle: You do? Aw, Elliot that's so sweet. But I'm Ian's girlfriend.
Elliot: But why do like him? He's so mean and bossy and jerky and Donner and Blitzen and-
Giselle: Look. If you want to know the truth, I hate Ian.
Elliot: You do?
Giselle: Yeah. I mean he's so stupid and repulsive and mocks others.
Elliot and Giselle: You might say he's Commander Stupid! Man, what an idiot!
(Elliot and Giselle relize they said what they were going to say at the same time and laugh together)
Elliot: Boy. You know, you and I, were 2 of a kind, baby. As soon as my training's over, we'll run away to a beautiful countryside, get married, have a son, I'm thinking of either Elliot Jr. or Gisellelliot. Get it? It's a combination of our names. Your name ends in "e" and my name begins with "e". It's a win-win.
Giselle: Elliot, look, I like you. I really do. You're cute, funny, maybe smart, but mostly cute and funny. But as long as I'm Ian's girlfriend, there's nothing I can't do.
Elliot: Things can change.
Giselle: I guess but still-
Elliot (while holding Giselle's Front hoof): Let's face it. You and I were meant to be.
Giselle: If it makes fell better, I'll think about it.
Elliot (Let's go of Giselle's front hoof): You'll think about it? Sweet.
Oh thank you, thank you! There's hope for us. There's hope!
Giselle: (giggles) You really are funny. I think I'll see you tommorow. Good night Elliot. (kisses Elliot and goes back to where she sleeps)
Elliot (blushed): WOOOHOOO!!!!! She loves me! She love me! Giselle loves me! I'm the happiest deer in the world!
(Elliot excitedly returns to his friends. We see a wolf behind a bush and leaves. Who is he? Tune in soon to find out! End of Scene 7)
Stay tuned for Scene 8!
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Post by Elliot's Girl on Mar 15, 2007 20:04:21 GMT -5
Wow that was....short. I'm not even gonna go there with the Elliot and Giselle part, so I'll keep that last comment to myself. *looks embarassed* But the laryngitis part was pretty funny. Who would had knew dummies could have that? ROFL, so far so good. Very nice story. Not bad, so far I enjoy some of the parts....away from the Giselle ones. Okay never mind me, keep on writing ;D
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Post by elliotdude on Mar 22, 2007 21:21:03 GMT -5
Scene 8 of Elliot's Academy is a go:
Elliot (narrating): As I went back to my squadron, little did I knew I was being watched.
(The wolf from the end of Scene 7, races into the woods, then a canyon with a bridge, where there is a hidden fortress. The wolf then races inside the fortress and enters a throne room, where the leader is in the shadows. The wolf walks in.)
Wolf Leader (in the shadows):What news have you brought from the front?
Wolf: I've tracked down the deer you requested, my lord.
Wolf Leader (in the shadows): Excellent. The perfect time for... (exits the shadows, we are revelaed to the leader who has a peg leg for his right leg.) revenge. For I, The Great Quasmeer, will finally get that idiotic deer.
Wolf: What is so important about this deer, anyway?
Quasmeer: That deer is the great grandson of Elliot the first, the deer who killed my great grandfather. Since then my family has been taking revenge on generation to generation. Ever since my father was killed by Elliot the 3rd, I had to cut off my right leg to destroy the pain and replace it with...this! (shows peg leg) The memory haunted me since I was a child when I witnessed it. And it still haunts me. He told me with his dying breath, to kill the deer's son. And that deer's son is Elliot the 4th. I will soon destroy him. Whatever it takes.
Wolf: What should we do, my lord?
Quasmeer: We will plan a full scale invasion on the deer. And I know how to tell them.
(Quasmeer goes to a weak, beatened up deer wth a ball and chain tied around his neck. Quasmeer grabs by the neck.)
Weak Deer (gasping for air): W-w-what do you want?
Quasmeer: I want you to tell your fellow deer friends back in the woods that... war is declared.
(Exterior of the Fortress' entrance)
Quasmeer (to weak deer): Don't think you're off the hook just yet. You're still going to die. (A scary wolf soldier named Travis comes out of the shadows) Poor, Travis. You haven't had your dinner yet? (to weak deer) Tell your friends that we're going to attack. You have a 10 second head start. And to show you I'm serious, you have 8 seconds. 8,7,6...
(Weak deer screams and runs fast away to tell the deer about the war) (to himself) 3,2,1. (to Travis) Get him. (Travis fastly follows the deer) Soon my nemesis. Soon. I will finally destroy you like your father destroyed mine. I know somewhere, you're plotting, thinking, waiting. Who knows what you're doing right now. (End of Scene 8)
Stayed tuned for Scene 9
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Post by Elliot's Girl on Mar 25, 2007 14:44:57 GMT -5
Wow.....a wolf and deer battle getting ready for war time. I getting chills. *Grabs my OS blankie* XDD
Again, keep on going, it's getting good....VERY good. And once again, I'll try to keep my thoughts on you-know-who to myself XDD
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Post by elliotdude on Mar 29, 2007 21:57:10 GMT -5
Now Scene 9 of Elliot's Academy
(Pitch Black/Elliot's Point of View. Elliot's sleeping.)
Floyd: Elliot? Elliot? (opens Elliot's right eye lids) Elliot? Are you awake?
Elliot: I am now.
Floyd: Awesome!
Clyde: Wakey, wakey! Eggs and bacey! Rise and shine! Good morning to you! thingy-a-doodle doo! Buenas Dias! Stop the world I wanna get on!
Elliot: Is he always like this?
Floyd: No. Sometimes he recites Shakespere in his sleep.
Gus: Guys, come on. Ian waiting for us. And you know what happens when were not on time.
Elliot: What?
(Later, Elliot, Floyd, Clyde, Gus, Monroe, and Lazlo do pushups)
Elliot (breathless): Pushups. Why did it have to be pushups? Why not bad mitten.
Ian: Why? Do you really want to play bad mitten?
Elliot: Please, sir.
Ian: Well then, send a letter to 5 years ago, then you'll get it...not! (Laughing) Oh that's good. That's very good.
Floyd: Laugh all you want, sir. Someday we'll be heroes along with our leader.
Elliot: Don't interfere.
Floyd: Why? I got your backside amigo.
Ian: Just so we're clear, you'll never be a hero. You'll always be a private.
Elliot: You mean, no superior rank in the future.
Ian: Exactly. Like I say, you represent dirt, and I represent myself kicking you around. In other words, I treat the loser ranks like dirt. And that's you! (Laughing) Besides, we never had a battle for 16 years. So you'll never be heroes. None of you! (laughing)
(Deer assistant enters)
Deer assistant: Sir! Sir! Someone enters from the woods.
Ian: Is it one of ours?
Deer asisstant: Yes, sir.
Ian: Come on.
(Ian and deer assistant go. Elliot and the Alpha 5 Squadron follow them. It's the beaten up deer from Scene 8. And this time, he's beaten up badly than ever before.)
Ian: Who's this.
Deer assistant: It's Hank sir. I thought he was on patrol for the 92906 Brigade.
Hank: W-w-w-w-w-w-w-
Ian: What? Water? Waffles? Watches?
Hank: No! (quietly)W-w-w-w-w-w-wolves.
Ian: What?
Hank: WOLVES! They're c-c-c-c-....c-c-c-c-coming!
Ian: Coming?
Elliot: Wolves?
Hank: W-w-w-w-w-war has been declared. There's n-n-n-no time to spare. Hurry! Before it's.....too.....late. Rosebud. (dies)
(Pause)
Ian: Give him a proper burial. Tell the troops about the war.
Deer assistant: Yes, sir. (exits)
Elliot: What's going on?
Ian: Our arch nemesises, the wolves. They declared war on us. Spread the word. (Exits)
Floyd: War? Oh boy.
Elliot: I have a bad feeling about this.
(End of Scene 9)
Stay tuned for Scene 10
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Post by Elliot's Girl on Mar 29, 2007 23:48:23 GMT -5
Ooooh the drama. *Plays psycho theme music* AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!! LOL, sorry could't resit. The supsense is killing me, seriously XD. Dun dun DUN!! ROFL, there I go there again. I like to see what happens next in the next chapter. I wonder how they're gonna win the battle against the wolves, sounds inpossible but it's worth a shot to see what's gonna happen to them. ^^
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Post by elliotdude on Apr 18, 2007 13:33:48 GMT -5
Sorry for the REALLY LONG delay. I promise to have part 10 for this or next week. U have my word.  |
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Post by Elliot's Girl on Apr 18, 2007 21:20:50 GMT -5
That's okay Elliotdude. We understand. We'll hold on the wait a little bit longer
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Post by elliotdude on Apr 25, 2007 10:06:40 GMT -5
And now, as I promised, Scene 10 of Elliot's Academy
(Enitre deer army is in a rowlistening to Ian's speech. Elliot and the Alpha 5 Squadron are there too. The Deer are wearing beehives on their heads as helmets. There are no bees inside except for Floyd's beehive helmet, which stings him.)
Ian: Fellow deer, leaders of tommorow, losers of today, (coughs)Alpha 5 Squadron, (coughs)
Gus: What did he say?
Floyd (While getting stinged by bees): I...ow...don't...ouch..know. Ouch!
Ian: Today, you will go into battle and...
(Quasmeer's Fortress. Entire wolf army in a row hearing Quasmeer's speech. (will be going back an forth to speeches))
Quasmeer: ...crush the pathetic mammals know as the deer! And we will...
(Back to Ian)
Ian: ...strike the entire wolf clan with one fell swoop. Some of you may not come back, but you will be fighting for...
(Back to Quasmeer)
Quasmeer: ...revenge! Especially revenge on the son of Elliot the 3rd. He will suffer as the same fate as my father. And you will go out to...
(Back to Ian)
Ian: ...show them who's boss. Together, we will be undefeated. Our enemies will...
(Back to Quasmeer)
Quasmeer: ...tremble before our knees. And if they do not comply, we will use their guts for garland, their heads for wicker baskets, and their bones for toothpicks. All will bow down to us and we will show them no mercy. They will be...
(Back to Ian)
Ian: ...outnumbered one by one. Now take your positions and go out...
(Back to Quasmeer)
Quasmeer: ...and...
(Back to Ian)
Ian: ...bring us...
(Back to Quasmeer)
Quasmeer: ...to...
(Back to Ian)
Ian: ...VICTORY!!!!!!!!
(Deer cheer)
(Quasmeer's fortress. Wolf cheer. Back to deer)
Floyd: It begins.
Elliot: What begins?
Floyd: Nothing. I just wanted to say that for dramatic effect.
(End of Scene 10)
Stay tuned for Scene 11
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Post by Elliot's Girl on Apr 25, 2007 20:32:39 GMT -5
Nice intro on the beginning of the battle before the war was starting. I like how you went back and fourth with Ian and Quuasmeer in that chapter. You don't see that happen a lot everytime a war starts. Keep going, can't wait for the fight to begin  |
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Post by elliotdude on May 9, 2007 19:41:18 GMT -5
And now (a week late) Scene 11 of Elliot's Academy:
(Mnay deer march in the woods one by one)
Deer Colonel: (singing) I don't know but I've been told.
Deer: (singing) I don't know but I've been told.
Deer Colonel: (singing) Singing songs like this is really old.
Deer: (singing) Singing songs like this is really old.
Deer Colonel: Sound off!
Deer: 1, 1.
Deer Colonel: Sound off!
Deer: 3,8.
Deer Colonel: Sound off!
Deer: 1, 9.
Deer Colonel: Sound Off!
Deer: 8, 8.
Elliot: Floyd.
Floyd: Yeah.
Elliot: If I don't make it, tell Giselle, I love her.
Floyd: And if I don't make it, tell Clyde....he's weird.
(The deer enter the battlefield where Quasmeer and the wolves are waiting. The Deer stop.)
Quameer: Just so you know, violence is not an option. So I'm willing for the wolf to scratch the deer and the deer to stampede, kick, headbutt.
(The deer discuss)
Ian: Very well.
Floyd: For Glory!
Elliot: Glory for us?
Floyd: No, Glory my friend, I wish she was here.
Glory: I'm right here.
Floyd: Ah, Elliot meet Glory. Glory, Elliot.
(End of Scene 11)
Stay tuned for Scene 12
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Post by Elliot's Girl on May 9, 2007 23:08:30 GMT -5
d**n, another short chapter! I'm still wondering how Ian is gonna be able to kick Elliot out the herd, I'm sure my sweetie pie will find a way to get his butt outta there....somehow. Oh my god, that sounded cold when I said that. LOL!
I like that one part where Floyd said "If I don't make it, tell Clyde...he's weird." LOL! That was a strange moment he said there my friend XD
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Post by elliotdude on May 23, 2007 11:51:23 GMT -5
Sorry again for the loooooong delay. But now, here's Scene 12 of Elliot's Academy.
(Long silence. The Deer and wolves look each other in the eye. Then....)
Quasmeer: ATTACK!!!!!
(The deer and wolves race to the battlefield. One deer headbutts 2 wolves. A wolf scratches a deer and falls to the ground. A deer grabs a wolf and spins him around and around and throws him into a tree. Ian charges and headbutts 8 wolves. Gus sleeps on the ground and wolves jump over him but they miss. Elliot gently punches on wolf and after 3 second of silence the wolf is in pain by the punch and acts dramatically.)
Wolf: AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! THE PAIN! MY SPLEEN! MY KIDNEYS. (Falls to ground) Goodbye....cruel world. (faints)
Elliot: Wow. I didn't know I had it in me.
(Lazlo is scared and dodges and ducks in every direction. He is then suddenly surounded by wolves he gets so scared that he runs and charges into wolf straight in the groin)
Wolf: That's...painful! (falls down)
(wolf look at Lazlo. Lazlo looks at them)
Lazlo (brave and yelling): COME ON! WHO'S NEXT? YOU WANNA PIECE OF ME?!?!?!? I'M READY, BABY!
(Wolves scream and run away.)
Lazlo: Yeah that's what I thought! No one messes with Lazlo Nevvywits! (Sees a leaf) AHHHHHHHHHHH! A LEAF!!! (Runs away)
Monroe (protesting): Peace not war! Peace not war! (The Wolves get confused)
Wolf: I wanna join--
Other Wolf: Don't!
(Floyd sommersaults a punches every wolf he passes.)
Floyd: I (punches wolf) use (punches another wolf) to (punches another wolf) be (punches another wolf) a (punches another wolf) gymnastic. (punches another wolf)
(Clyde runs very fast that the wolves fail to grab him)
Clyde (sticks out his toungue): Meep! Meep! (and runs)
(Elliot charges and headbutts 17 wolves. And the wolves run away.)
Elliot: Oh yeah baby! You mess with my kind you mess with me!
Quasmeer: Oh really?
(Elliot then sees Quasmeer)
Quasmeer: I beg to differ. (he then puches Elliot. Quasmeer is ready to jump on him and Elliot runs. Quasmeer attacks Elliot. Lots of biting, scratching, punching, and pinching goes around. Floyd, Gus, Monroe, Clyde, and Lazlo sees the action.)
Gus: What are we going to do?
(Floyd thinks)
Floyd: I got it! Huddle up!
(Floyd, Gus, Monroe, Clyde, and Lazlo huddle.)
Floyd: I have a plan.
(End of Scene 12)
What's their plan? Find outm in Scene 13 coming soon!
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Post by Elliot's Girl on May 23, 2007 22:03:46 GMT -5
OMG! SAVE ELLIOT! SAVE EEEEELLLLLLIIIIOOOOOOTTTTT!!! *pauses for slience* Oh, sorry......   Ahem....as I was gonna say. Very good battle. This is more weirder than the battle part from the movie. Which reminds me, I should start writing that next chapter from my fanfic Life Gets Hard very soon....or else!!  *Goes and tries to get more ideas for the fanfic* XP |
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Post by elliotdude on May 31, 2007 17:04:47 GMT -5
And now Scene 13 of Elliot's Academy!
(Picking up where Scene 12 left off, Elliot and Quasmeer are still fighting. Elliot gets tired and losing strength. At that point, Quasmeer punches Elliot so hard, he falls to the ground.)
Quasmeer: For too long I've waited for this.
Elliot: Why? Why are you doing this?
Quasmeer (grabs Elliot by the neck): Because... your father killed mine.
Elliot: That's what this is all about?
Quasmeer: What? You want me to draw a picture? For almost 4 generations have you and my ancestors battled against each other. And since your last ancestor, which is your father, killed my father, I vowed to that day that the rest of my generation would not be destoryed. (Let's go of Elliot.)
Elliot: But my dad... my dad was and always will be the greatest, he told me he was doing what was right. He even told me stories about how your wolf ancestors ruled the forest with an iron fist. Killing innocent deer and... slavery. He even told about my great-grandfather who started a resistance to bring yours down. He hoped your great-grandfather gave up. But every generation it happens over and over again. We are the peacemakers and your the corupt. I've seen deer do great things since I was a kid. And maybe...maybe I will die today or maybe in 20 years. But I know that if I had a kid and you had a kid, mine will still kick your kid's butt. For we are superior and are the elite. And you know that....don't you?
(Quasmeer grabs Elliot by the neck again and punches him. Elliot falls to the ground.)
Quasmeer: I HAVE HAD ENOUGH OF HOW GREAT YOUR ANCESTORS WERE! I INTEND FOR THIS BATTLE TO BE MY WIN! MY EMPIRE! MY REVENGE! SO LONG YOU NO GOOD-
(Just then Quasmeer hears somebody say "Bansai!" and it gets louder and louder.)
Quasmeer: What the- (Then, Quasmeer suddenly sails through the air and falls to the ground. The dust settles. It's Floyd, Gus, Monroe, Lazlo, and Clyde atop on another.)
Elliot: Guys?
Floyd: Elliot! Thank goodness to The Great Kutcher Pine Tree you're alright!
Elliot: What is this?
Monroe: It's our signature move, man. The Charger Mark 6.
Elliot: Charger Mock 6.
Floyd: It means "all of us" signature move. Get on top buddy.
(Elliot gets on top of Floyd. Quasmeer suddenly comes back.)
Quasmeer: THAT'S IT! I'VE HAD WITH YOU! (Ignites claws) Any last words.
Elliot: Just this... what's that?
Quasmeer: Where? (The deer charge so hard that Quasmeer sails through the air, lands near a cliff a grabs on it. The Deer get of each other and get near Quasmeer.)\
Quasmeer: You think this is over?
Elliot: I know it's over.
(Elliot steps on Quasmeer hand)
Quasmeer: OWWW! (Relizing he just let go of the cliff) AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Then a thud. Silence as the deer look down)
Quasmeer (At bottom, off screen): I'm O.K.
Lazlo: I don't think so. (Pushes a boulder off the cliff, then a bigger thud.)
Quameer (At bottom, off screen): O.K. Now I'm hurt! Yes! Definately hurt!
Elliot: Thanks guys. You're the best team a deer could have.
Gus: Group hug! (The deer hug one another. Clyde kisses Elliot.)
Elliot: O.K. That was arkward.
(End of scene 13. Stay tuned for Scene 14. The story isn't over yet!)
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*Goes and tries to get more ideas for the fanfic* XP